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Written by Michel Fortin

Headlines That Pull, Persuade, And Propel!

iStock 000002340916XSmall 150x150 Headlines That Pull, Persuade, And Propel!When writ­ing direct response copy, a few things can max­i­mize the respon­sive­ness of your mes­sage. The first and most impor­tant ele­ment that can turn any web­site, saleslet­ter, or adver­tise­ment into an action-​​generating mech­a­nism is, with­out ques­tion, the head­line.

But lately, I’m see­ing more and more head­lines that are limp, bloated, or sim­ply dead wrong.

A head­line is meant to do two vital things.

No more and no less. First, it needs to grab your reader’s atten­tion. That’s the pri­mary and most impor­tant job of the head­line. It’s not meant to sum­ma­rize an offer or be a para­graph in and of itself. It’s not meant to make a sale, either.

You know what I’m talk­ing about, right? Head­lines like these make me twitch…

“Stomp Out Yo-​​Yo Diets For Good When You Apply The Amaz­ing Acci­den­tally Dis­cov­ered Secret Weight­loss Strat­egy That Can Lit­er­ally Triple Your Energy, Boost Your Immune Sys­tem, And Shed Unwanted Pounds of Pure, Stub­born Fat With­out Mov­ing A Sin­gle Inch And While Eat­ing Every­thing Your Heart Fan­cies — Even If You Carry The Fat-​​Magnetizing Genes Of Some­one Who Can’t Lose A Sin­gle Ounce After Run­ning Back-​​To-​​Back Marathons… Start­ing As Early As Tonight, 100% Guaranteed!”

Ugh.

Dou­ble ugh.

Peo­ple not only won’t read it all, much less your saleslet­ter, but it also imme­di­ately sends off alarm bells way too early that your copy is a bla­tant sales pitch.

In today’s fax-​​microwave-​​email world, peo­ple want every­thing fast. Their atten­tion span is smaller than an sub­atomic par­ti­cle. Online, they surf the web in a click-​​happy state, ready to open and close browser win­dows at the blink of an eye. Literally.

For exam­ple, they tend to scan web pages quickly, even many of them simul­ta­ne­ously. Your site is but a blur to them. So, your head­line must be promi­nent, effec­tive enough to stop them, and effi­cient to do so in a very short span of time.

And the headline’s sec­ond job is, it needs pull the reader into the copy.

To do that, it must cre­ate curios­ity. It must be inter­est­ing enough to pull the reader in and push her fur­ther into the copy. It must be pithy enough — not nec­es­sar­ily short but straight­for­ward enough — to do its job in the least amount of words possible.

And finally, it must cater to a spe­cific emo­tion or a rel­e­vant con­di­tion that speaks to the tar­get mar­ket at a per­sonal level, and does so imme­di­ately and with as lit­tle think­ing as pos­si­ble — one to which the reader can eas­ily and instantly associate.

Before I give you some exam­ples, note that most of these head­lines were enor­mously suc­cess­ful for my clients, not because they were tested and tweaked, but because they were actu­ally stolen from other, equally suc­cess­ful ads or salesletters.

All copy­writ­ers worth their salt do this. They steal. Recy­cle. Copy. Model. Swipe.

But above all, they adapt.

Of course, they mustn’t be copied ver­ba­tim. When I say “steal,” I mean to do it in an eth­i­cal way. There’s a big dif­fer­ence between pla­gia­rism and mod­el­ling. But they can be eas­ily adapted to fit the mar­ket, the offer, and the message.

I have a large swipe file that con­tains copies of ads, web­sites, direct mail pieces and saleslet­ters I come across. I then turn them into tem­plates or “fill-​​in-​​the-​​blanks” formulas.

Here’s a list of “trig­gers,” cou­pled with actual exam­ples I used in the past:

  • Curios­ity (“Revealed! Closely Guarded Secrets For …”)
  • Mys­tery (“The Five Biggest Mis­takes to Avoid By …”)
  • Fear (“Over 98.4% of Peo­ple End up Broke When …”)
  • Pain (“Suf­fer­ing From Need­less Back Pain? Then …”)
  • Con­ve­nience (“How to Increase Your Chances With …”)
  • Envy (“How Fel­low Mar­keter Pum­mels Com­peti­tors By …”)
  • Jeal­ousy (“They All Laughed When … Until I …”)
  • Sloth (“Slash Your Learn­ing Curve By 57% When …”)
  • Love, Lust (“Make Her Fall in Love With You With …”)
  • Shock (“Finally Exposed! Get The Dirty Truth On …”)
  • Greed (“Boost Your Income By More Than 317% When …”)
  • Pride, Power, Ego (“Make Fel­low Work­ers Squirm With …”)
  • Assur­ance (“… In Less Than 60 Days, Guaranteed!”)
  • Immor­tal­ity (“Reverse The Aging Process With …”)
  • Anger (“Banks Are Rip­ping You Off! Here’s Why …”)

Study and model suc­cess­ful copy­writ­ing as much as you can.

Dan Kennedy, a suc­cess­ful copy­writer, teaches this exer­cise: buy tabloids, such as The National Enquirer, on a reg­u­lar basis. Of course, the pub­li­ca­tion may be ques­tion­able for some, and it may not nec­es­sar­ily fit with your style or cater to your market.

But here’s the rea­son why.

Ad space in tabloids is excru­ci­at­ingly expen­sive. If an ad is repeated in more than two issues, prefer­ably copy-​​dense ads and full-​​page adver­to­ri­als, com­mon sense tells you that the ad is prof­itable. Rip out the ad and put it into your swipe file.

(If you don’t have one, a short­cut is to copy some­one else’s, like this list of head­lines from Jay Abra­ham, or swipe from proven list of suc­cess­ful head­lines. But also, don’t dis­count super­mar­ket mag­a­zines, like Cosmo, Van­ity Fair, Men’s Health, and the like.)

Then, copy the head­lines into a doc­u­ment. They can be eas­ily con­verted into “fill-​​in-​​the-​​blanks” for­mu­las. Keep in mind, you need to under­stand why the head­line worked — sim­ply swap­ping in a few words here and there doesn’t mean it will work.

Swip­ing, done cor­rectly, can work well with almost all mar­kets. I’ve tried these types of head­lines on both low-​​end and high-​​end clients, from sim­ple $10 prod­ucts to six-​​figure invest­ment oppor­tu­ni­ties. And they worked quite effec­tively in both situations.

The cos­met­ics of a head­line is equally impor­tant if not more so. The type must be bold, large, and promi­nently placed, even writ­ten in a dif­fer­ent font or type­style, if pos­si­ble. It must draw atten­tion. It must grab your read­ers “by the eyeballs.”

Remem­ber, your first job is to catch their atten­tion. Then, and only then, it’s to get them to start read­ing your let­ter. And the head­line is often the best tool to do this.

Speci­ficity is also quite impor­tant. The more spe­cific you are with your head­line, the bet­ter the response will be. Use odd, non-​​rounded num­bers because they are more believ­able and pull more than even, rounded numbers.

(For exam­ple, in its com­mer­cials, Ivory Soap used to say that it was “99.44% pure.” Oth­er­wise, if it used “100%,” it likely wouldn’t have been as believable.)

When­ever pos­si­ble, be quan­tifi­able, mea­sur­able, and time-​​bound.

For exam­ple, don’t say “how to increase your income” or “make money fast.” Words like “income” and “fast” are vague. Instead, say, “How six sim­ple sales strate­gies helped me stum­ble onto an unex­pected $5,431.96 wind­fall — in less than 27 hours!”

The big­ger the num­bers are, the greater the impact is. If the same num­ber can be pre­sented in a way where the numer­als are larger, then use the larger one.

For instance, if you say “five times more,” replace it with “500%” (or bet­ter yet, “517%” or “483%”). Don’t say “one year,” say “364 days.” The brain thinks in pic­tures, not num­bers or words. Both terms may mean the same thing, but one is per­ceived as bigger.

Using some of the trig­gers men­tioned at the begin­ning of this arti­cle, here are some exam­ples of being spe­cific with your head­lines (see if you notice them):

  • Nine Jeal­ously Guarded Tech­niques That …”
  • Here Are 17 of My Most Prized Recipes For …”
  • How I Made $42,791.36 in Only 11 Days With …”
  • Boost Your Golf Dri­ves By 27 Yards When …”
  • A Whole New Way to Lose 45 Pounds in 7 Weeks With …”
  • Mar­ket­ing Toolkit Con­tains 35 Pow­er­tools That …”
  • Fol­low These Eight Mag­i­cal Steps to …”
  • Read This 22-​​Chapter, 376-​​Page Powerhouse …”
  • The 10 Com­mand­ments of Power Posi­tion­ing …”
  • Chop Paper­work By as Much as 47% When …”
  • Slash Your Learn­ing Curve By Four Weeks With …”
  • … And Start Within Only 33 Minutes!”

My favorite head­line for­mula is one I call the “gap­per,” which is based on the pain-​​pleasure prin­ci­ple. In sales, it’s often referred to as “gap analy­sis.”

(Dan Kennedy calls it “Problem-​​Agitate-​​Solve.” That is, you start by pre­sent­ing a prob­lem. You agi­tate your audi­ence by mak­ing the prob­lem “big­ger,” more sig­nif­i­cant, and more urgent. And then you present your solu­tion in the offer.)

There’s a gap between a prospect’s prob­lem and its solu­tion — or a gap between where one is now and where that per­son wants to be in the future. But many prospects either don’t know there is a gap or, because it is one, nat­u­rally have a ten­dency to ignore it.

It’s sim­ply human nature.

So, a head­line that com­mu­ni­cates the pres­ence of such a gap — and par­tic­u­larly one that helps to widen it — will likely appeal to those who can imme­di­ately relate to it. That is, the peo­ple who hap­pen to fit within that spe­cific site’s tar­get market.

For exam­ple, a head­line for a diet pro­gram might say:

“62% of Amer­i­cans Are Only One Ham­burger Shy of a Heart Attack, Doc­tor Reports.”

This head­line speaks to the gap of a health-​​conscious mar­ket who are obese and want to do some­thing about it, and widens it by instill­ing a sense of dan­ger and urgency.

(In addi­tion to the head­line, this can be accom­plished through other com­po­nents, such as a sur­head­line, sub­head­line, “lift” copy, side­notes, deck copy, or lead sen­tences. For instance, a sub­head­line to the above might say: “Here’s what you can do about it now.”)

By open­ing the gap or widen­ing it helps to rein­force a sense of urgency in the mind.

After the head­line, vis­i­tors will want to know how, by read­ing fur­ther, they can close that gap. And the wider the gap is, the greater the desire to close it will be — and the more valu­able the gap-​​closing solu­tion, which is your offer, will be as well.

Why? Because it appeals to stronger motives.

Abra­ham Maslow, the famous psy­chol­o­gist who devel­oped the hier­ar­chy of human motives, stated that the foun­da­tion of all human needs is our need to sur­vive. Once sat­is­fied, the next one is our need for safety. Our need to be with other peo­ple is next, fol­lowed by our need to feel appre­ci­ated. Finally, our need to be chal­lenged is at the top.

The “pain-​​pleasure prin­ci­ple” states that peo­ple either fear pain and try to avoid it, or crave plea­sure and try to gain it. When given a choice between the two, how­ever, and accord­ing to Maslow, pain is almost always a supe­rior motive.

Our need to sur­vive and feel safe, which are at the bot­tom of Maslow’s pyra­mid, rule over all other needs, which are social, esteem and self-​​improvement needs.

So a head­line that com­mu­ni­cates a prob­lem (i.e., a painful sit­u­a­tion or a poten­tially painful one that may arise with­out the ben­e­fits of your offer) will have more impact.

Peo­ple who asso­ciate with the mes­sage will feel com­pelled to read more, which also helps to qual­ify your read­ers — it iso­lates the “seri­ous” from the “curious.”

You heard it before: there’s a dif­fer­ence between “needs” and “wants.”

When I work with plas­tic sur­geons, I often tell them to use as a head­line, “Suf­fer­ing from wrin­kles?” That way, it pulls only qual­i­fied prospects into the ad because it appeals not only to peo­ple with wrin­kles but also to those who suf­fer from wrin­kles (i.e., they want to do some­thing about them, since not every­one who has wrin­kles are both­ered by them).

A web saleslet­ter I recently wrote for Michael Mur­ray talks about the fact that he is a col­lege stu­dent stricken with cere­bral palsy who’s “made it” online. The copy and most of the head­ers use some of the trig­gers I men­tioned earlier.

Below is a brief list. Can you iden­tify them?

  • SPECIAL REPORT! Want to cash in on …”
  • … But don’t have a prod­uct or a website?”
  • “How a ‘Phys­i­cally Dis­abled’ Teenager …”
  • Earn a $2,000-to-17,000 Monthly Down­pour of Dollars …”
  • … On a Shoe­string Budget!”
  • Jeal­ously guarded ‘secrets’ are finally revealed …”
  • Get your hands on dirt-​​cheap prod­ucts to sell …”
  • You’ll never have to cre­ate your own products!”
  • … Model after actual web­sites ‘mak­ing it’ BIG TIME!”
  • PLUS, for a lim­ited time only, the next 500 orders …”
  • And if I can do it, I’m sure most ‘abled’ peo­ple can!”

At the time of writ­ing the let­ter, Michael was a 19-​​year old with cere­bral palsy.

Also known as the “Bill Porter” of online mar­ket­ing, Michael and his story moved me per­son­ally. But in choos­ing his head­line specif­i­cally, my biggest con­cern was, most peo­ple have become so desen­si­tized with oppor­tu­ni­ties of this nature.

So, in order to beef up the atten­tion fac­tor, I used what John Carl­ton often calls “the incon­gru­ous jux­ta­po­si­tion of seem­ingly irrel­e­vant ideas, things, or events,” and catered to people’s emo­tions by using Michael’s dis­abil­ity as a psy­cho­log­i­cal “hook.”

I wanted the head­line to stop peo­ple in their tracks and force them to say to them­selves, “If a teenage kid with cere­bral palsy can make that much money, then there must be some­thing in here I need to know more about…”

Ulti­mately, ask your­self: “Does my head­line effec­tively stop peo­ple from scan­ning, cap­ture their atten­tion, and trig­ger their emo­tions in order to pull them into the copy?”

More impor­tantly, ask your­self, “Does my open­ing state­ment beg for atten­tion, and gen­uinely cater to the dom­i­nant motives and res­i­dent emo­tions of my market?”

If not, change your head­line, even with the same copy.

Sure, it may be a small and insignif­i­cant change over­all. But some­times the small­est changes in your copy can be the ones that cre­ate the most dra­matic changes in results.

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